Do let us know what they think!
I gotta cruise for now.... I'll be back on later this evening, ladies. Have a good night to you all
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Tess,
I have to tell you that, one of your stories you wrote: "Faith, Love and Courage" - this story is excellent! (I have edited some few sentences and fixed some grammar, if you want to see the edited version, just let me know)
It is very interesting that the story was based on a true story, your description in this prologue is very good, like in what Eddy said in the letter for instance was good. I have to say.
But only one con, on your way of writing, all your paragraghs are squashed together, I suggest you try to seperate it out - just to make sure they are more room for the reader to read it in a relaxing way. (for example, in the edited version I did on your story).
Overall, very good story!
Jake
Thank you. You read the whole thing one night?? You must be a fast reader. Elwood read it too. I know about that part where it was too much, I just save that part so I remember and figure out the good way to smooth out those long paragraphs. It was the first draft I wrote. I wrote this true story in three weeks flat and I never went back to edit my work yet. I know it needs to smooth it out. I just type and type nonstop till the end. And the story is not complete yet. I was going to work on it real soon. I want to finish it first, then go back to edit each chapters at a time. It was really hard for me to go back and finish the story. 