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::foundation::
ill awe
artificial honor
hazy opportunities
obtuse cliques
coy exploitations
easily self-inflicted
sordid victims
vicious fibs
fudged proficiency
paralyzed obedience
optimistic employers
eager bastards
bloodsucking freeloaders
fair damnation
discrimination prostitutes
protests subdued
self-subscribing illiteracy
idiot farms
flagrant education
ensuing boredom
brain fatalities
foolish societies
silence continues
comic progress
people ill-tempered
intelligence unattractive
unsought agreements
abandoned aspirations
aimless drones
declassed innocents
of
ill awe!

- Deaf258 © 2000, 2001
 
Deaf258 said:
::foundation::
ill awe
artificial honor
hazy opportunities
obtuse cliques
coy exploitations
easily self-inflicted
sordid victims
vicious fibs
fudged proficiency
paralyzed obedience
optimistic employers
eager bastards
bloodsucking freeloaders
fair damnation
discrimination prostitutes
protests subdued
self-subscribing illiteracy
idiot farms
flagrant education
ensuing boredom
brain fatalities
foolish societies
silence continues
comic progress
people ill-tempered
intelligence unattractive
unsought agreements
abandoned aspirations
aimless drones
declassed innocents
of
ill awe!

- Deaf258 © 2000, 2001
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2 555555888888. I think maybe(I am not an expert at poetry myself so I really shouldn't make this comment but...) if you add the commas after each line, it would make it clarifying? Because at first I thought you were just naming stuff that shares a theme but then "of/ ill awe!" and I understood completely. Comic Progess of ill awe, discrimination prostitutes of ill awe, etc ...

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This poem is a very interesting one and doesn't need commas, because it has a pattern. Can you figure it out? ;)

And I wrote this about the attitudes of Deaf and Hearing societies in general.
 
i can see the pattern
of opposites/sarcasms

:lol:
 
answer: attitudes ? if i'm wrong, then i give up...
what's the pattern were you speaking of ?
 
This is a pattern of somewhat a fitting description stereotyping society ills...maybe I'm not being quite clear on this, but I do see a pattern here...for each two lines...with the first one/line being the kind of stereotyped function/person, etc. and the second line being the fitting description of that....nonetheless, it is good....
 
Yup, and that is another pattern there too.. I will go ahead and tell you the most secret one.. Look at the initials of the first and last words and then look at the next line.. and you can keep going down the poem and see that hidden pattern.. Can you see it?
;)
 
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