Anyone mind proofing my asl paper?

[NeedAslHelp]

I am writing my first ASL paper in a story format for a class. I have to have it completely in ASL and have an English version as well to later sign both in front of the class. My teacher said I still have a lot of English left in my ASL version after my first attempt at translating. Was wondering if I could send it to anyone for a read over and maybe edit or just tell my general mistakes even as my assistant teacher hasn't been too much help, sadly the section she did help me with my teacher ripped me a new one for it being really wrong.

I had a friend who was suppose to help me who is in a higher level of sign language but has recently gotten quite sick, so I am desperate for someone to proof.

Please and thank you!

P.S. I hope this is the proper place to post this, I am sorry if I am wrong.