The Melancholy Melody

Juanita

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The Melancholy Melody

The darkness, the shadows
The cold draft from a cracked window
The smell of death hovers in the air
The floor stained with tainted tears

The sorrows, the misery
The broken pain of losing a loved one
The agony of loneliness takes over your heart
Grief comes out in black

The acid rain, the rolling thunders
Washing away the sins you executed
To be drowning in the depression pool
Generating thyself a pictorial world

The purity, the innocents
Pithiness made for the slaughtered
Wrapped in the thorny webs of lies
Break, bruise, and bleed for the deception

The haunting music, the painful cries
Of those murdered and left to die
Cruelty is a part of me and you
Immaturity of one's senses

The judgmental twists, the cynical clarifications
The pulsation of the gavel on the wood
The roars of the sharks' claims
The gentle stirs of the weeping widow

The tinkling, the banging
The rhythm of tin cups against the bars
Scraps of edible food on the cold, damp floor
The forlorn howls of those one too many caged souls

The invisible, the unknown
Visions blurred as one tries to know others
The ability to recognize beyond possible
The blankness of one's mind as one tries to think

The voice of a crooning raven
The melancholy melody, it sings
Sadness spreads across the land
As the lone bird continues the song​
 
OH my gosh I love that poem! You are awesome, you should talk to some people :gossip: and get this published.
 
Very, depressing but very well written. Is this based on a true-to-life story? Who is in prison? Care to expand? If not, that's okay.
 
Good vivid imagination relayed into various words of descripition...yet, deep and a cold dark setting...like as a person is sooo alone, trapped or like Tousi said, in prison....altogether, it is written well....a good piece of work! :thumb:
 
Man, I read it again and it is soooooooooooo eerily haunting...reminds me of the one and only---Edgar Allan Poe!
 
Tousi said:
Man, I read it again and it is soooooooooooo eerily haunting...reminds me of the one and only---Edgar Allan Poe!
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Ahhh...gonna hear some croonin' in your dreams tonight??? :cool:
 
It sound like a muscial.. But it is GREAT poem.. Why not become a poetry? It will make you a millionaire... :)
 
Juanita said:
The Melancholy Melody

The darkness, the shadows
The cold draft from a cracked window
The smell of death hovers in the air
The floor stained with tainted tears

The sorrows, the misery
The broken pain of losing a loved one
The agony of loneliness takes over your heart
Grief comes out in black

The acid rain, the rolling thunders
Washing away the sins you executed
To be drowning in the depression pool
Generating thyself a pictorial world

The purity, the innocents
Pithiness made for the slaughtered
Wrapped in the thorny webs of lies
Break, bruise, and bleed for the deception

The haunting music, the painful cries
Of those murdered and left to die
Cruelty is a part of me and you
Immaturity of one's senses

The judgmental twists, the cynical clarifications
The pulsation of the gavel on the wood
The roars of the sharks' claims
The gentle stirs of the weeping widow

The tinkling, the banging
The rhythm of tin cups against the bars
Scraps of edible food on the cold, damp floor
The forlorn howls of those one too many caged souls

The invisible, the unknown
Visions blurred as one tries to know others
The ability to recognize beyond possible
The blankness of one's mind as one tries to think

The voice of a crooning raven
The melancholy melody, it sings
Sadness spreads across the land
As the lone bird continues the song​
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Awesome! but sad! did you really write it? Juanita?..it sounded strangely familiar but maybe there is one that is similiar to this one....
 
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