icecl_out1
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Here is one of my latest poems I have written....let me know what you think.
Swimming In My Own Guilt
She gives me the stare,
her green eyes telling me I’ve done wrong.
As she peers into my soul,
she makes me think about what’s going on.
Our fights and our arguments,
ruining the great relationship we’ve built.
For once silence as I sit here thinking what I’ve done,
swimming in my own guilt.
Was it worth it?
She asks through anger and tears,
Was that one night of messing around and cheating,
worth losing what me and you have developed throughout the years?
As she walked out the door
I hung my head in shame and knelt,
crying, knowing for the rest of my life,
I’d be swimming in my own guilt.
Swimming In My Own Guilt
She gives me the stare,
her green eyes telling me I’ve done wrong.
As she peers into my soul,
she makes me think about what’s going on.
Our fights and our arguments,
ruining the great relationship we’ve built.
For once silence as I sit here thinking what I’ve done,
swimming in my own guilt.
Was it worth it?
She asks through anger and tears,
Was that one night of messing around and cheating,
worth losing what me and you have developed throughout the years?
As she walked out the door
I hung my head in shame and knelt,
crying, knowing for the rest of my life,
I’d be swimming in my own guilt.
...I just like having an outsiders view on my poems. I mean to me they're good but i want to know what others think. so yeah thanks for your opinions. I am actually thinking of entering this poem into a contest. wish me luck.
