ASL Assignment

[Beedurmus]

So we have an assignment in ASL to sign a children's story in front of the class. I decided on Dog Heaven by Cynthia Rylant because it's my favorite children's book and because it's meant a lot to me lately after my puppy ran away. I went through and tried to translate it as best I could, but we haven't gotten very far into grammar and syntax yet.. I'm not sure if she's going to be strict on grading that or not. I was wondering if someone would be willing to read over it and let me know what you think, if I need to work on it? I can either post it here or e-mail if anyone is up for it.