"The Castle In My Mind" - Page 3

dreamchaser · 05-05-2008, 07:50 PM

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Originally Posted by Sweetpolly

Beautiful story and I love all the describing words you used! I love it!! Keep up your writing your awesome.

Hey Polly, thanks so much. That was sweet. I hope that this little story might reach into the hearts of the hearing people that see Deaf people as broken and help them to not be afraid to cross the bridge of understanding that separates us.

thanks again.. Jeanie.. still chasin the dream for a better tomorrow for all.

Danielle4ASL · 05-06-2008, 12:00 PM

wow... thats all i can say right now you emailed me to read this and i am so speechless but that was by far the most b eautiful story i have read in a while. your an amazing writier and i just cant event hink of what else to say. beautiful story well done.

dreamchaser · 05-06-2008, 12:50 PM

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Originally Posted by Danielle4ASL

wow... thats all i can say right now you emailed me to read this and i am so speechless but that was by far the most b eautiful story i have read in a while. your an amazing writier and i just cant event hink of what else to say. beautiful story well done.

Thanks so much...

I am not worthy!

mandy · 05-09-2008, 03:26 PM

Good story. Agree with comments re. beginning, could have drawn it out for dramatic tension but can SO sympathise with space constraints! (I am part of a flash fiction workshop, defined as a story which can be read in 15 minutes or less...)
BUT: I didn't think you needed last paragraph, your story was strong and got message over without it. Maybe you could take it out and re-use extra space/words for intro?

dreamchaser · 05-10-2008, 02:04 PM

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Originally Posted by mandy

Good story. Agree with comments re. beginning, could have drawn it out for dramatic tension but can SO sympathise with space constraints! (I am part of a flash fiction workshop, defined as a story which can be read in 15 minutes or less...)
BUT: I didn't think you needed last paragraph, your story was strong and got message over without it. Maybe you could take it out and re-use extra space/words for intro?

Hi Mandy,,, I did a rewrite with a more descriptive beginning. I don't know where the post ended up,, lol..

thanks again.

05-06-2008, 12:00 PM	#62 (permalink)
Danielle4ASL HEY EVERYONE IM NEW TO AD Join Date: May 2008 Location: NEW YORK Posts: 11 Blog Entries: 5	wow... thats all i can say right now you emailed me to read this and i am so speechless but that was by far the most b eautiful story i have read in a while. your an amazing writier and i just cant event hink of what else to say. beautiful story well done. __________________ SMILES- DANIELLE

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05-09-2008, 03:26 PM	#64 (permalink)
mandy mandy Join Date: Apr 2008 Location: Cape Town South Africa Posts: 19	Good story. Agree with comments re. beginning, could have drawn it out for dramatic tension but can SO sympathise with space constraints! (I am part of a flash fiction workshop, defined as a story which can be read in 15 minutes or less...) BUT: I didn't think you needed last paragraph, your story was strong and got message over without it. Maybe you could take it out and re-use extra space/words for intro?