Revised! Poem: "Sister"

deafbajagal · 11-19-2010, 08:55 PM

Sister,
remember that dark sticky night
we caught the fireflies
in Mason jars with rusty, punched lids?

Our hair was wet from sweat
and our hands red
from writing with sticks;
black from the tire swing
Daddy had promised to hang
on the warped oak tree.
One day, he said. One day.

It was there, remember,
where the white fairies
bid their farewells to the moonless sky.

Momma's screams finally stopped,
and the glass door shattered.
The red and the black and the blue
all came together
like painted motor oil
which never dries.

It was that night
we had forgotten.
The fireflies we caught,
trapped in a glass world,
died.

cayisgreat · 01-05-2011, 02:16 PM

I'm normally not one for poetry, but this was excellent! When did you write it? What was your insperation for it?

LinuxGold · 01-05-2011, 02:21 PM

Very nice poem!

jenniifer · 01-07-2011, 09:32 AM

In today's paper is the story of a murder-suicide, husband beat wife to death with a hammer, then killed himself. Two children in the house at the time. That is what this poem made me think of. It is beautiful, but the part about the mother's screams...that makes it all come together. I would like to know what the poet's inspiration was as well.

11-19-2010, 08:55 PM	#1 (permalink)
deafbajagal Registered User Join Date: Nov 2007 Location: USA Posts: 5,171	Revised! Poem: "Sister" Sister, remember that dark sticky night we caught the fireflies in Mason jars with rusty, punched lids? Our hair was wet from sweat and our hands red from writing with sticks; black from the tire swing Daddy had promised to hang on the warped oak tree. One day, he said. One day. It was there, remember, where the white fairies bid their farewells to the moonless sky. Momma's screams finally stopped, and the glass door shattered. The red and the black and the blue all came together like painted motor oil which never dries. It was that night we had forgotten. The fireflies we caught, trapped in a glass world, died.

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01-05-2011, 02:16 PM	#2 (permalink)
cayisgreat Registered User Join Date: Dec 2010 Location: USA- ask :) Posts: 103	I'm normally not one for poetry, but this was excellent! When did you write it? What was your insperation for it?

01-05-2011, 02:21 PM	#3 (permalink)
LinuxGold Registered User Join Date: Apr 2003 Location: Elkton, MD Posts: 2,463	Very nice poem!

01-07-2011, 09:32 AM	#4 (permalink)
jenniifer Registered User Join Date: Dec 2010 Location: northeastern US Posts: 169	In today's paper is the story of a murder-suicide, husband beat wife to death with a hammer, then killed himself. Two children in the house at the time. That is what this poem made me think of. It is beautiful, but the part about the mother's screams...that makes it all come together. I would like to know what the poet's inspiration was as well.