New Writers or Writers Not Poll - Page 3

restless_heart · 07-19-2007, 10:34 PM

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Originally Posted by jclarke

Where's the URL then?

FictionPress.Com : Profile : Tess Grisham

An agent said the weakness are my POV and scene/structure. Can she be simpfy what she was trying to point at...everyone said nothing wrong with it.

**JClarke** · 07-19-2007, 10:34 PM

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Originally Posted by jclarke

Where's the URL then?

I mean, restless - > What is your URL link to your story - and your username that is registered in the fictionpress.com?

sara1981 · 07-19-2007, 10:36 PM

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Originally Posted by Mann_K05

Whats abt ur weakness?

i told you i dont like nightmares when im read books

restless_heart · 07-19-2007, 10:38 PM

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Originally Posted by sara1981

i told you i dont like nightmares when im read books

I love nightmares. Everyone has different taste, don't we...some people don't, some people do. Do you thing tradgey and nightmares are bound the same? I wonder....

**JClarke** · 07-19-2007, 10:38 PM

Whoa - these stories got plenty of words - that will take me ages to read but Iwill leave it aside for now as I have a meeting to go to very soon, but i will post up what I think when I have finished reading the stories of yours and also which agents did you give when you got accepted?

**JClarke** · 07-19-2007, 10:40 PM

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Originally Posted by sara1981

i told you i dont like nightmares when im read books

Whoa, big words! Like restless said, everyone has their different taste, indeed.

**KarissaMann05** · 07-19-2007, 10:43 PM

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Originally Posted by sara1981

i told you i dont like nightmares when im read books

Gee, clam down.. heh

No, That's not what I mean.

weakness that i refer to grammar error, vocaborty limit, etc

not in interest or anything else ^_^

**JClarke** · 07-19-2007, 10:46 PM

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Originally Posted by Mann_K05

Gee, clam down.. heh

No, That's not what I mean.

weakness that i refer to grammar error, vocaborty limit, etc

not in interest or anything else ^_^

Agreed! That's the

restless_heart · 07-19-2007, 10:48 PM

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Originally Posted by jclarke

Whoa - these stories got plenty of words - that will take me ages to read but Iwill leave it aside for now as I have a meeting to go to very soon, but i will post up what I think when I have finished reading the stories of yours and also which agents did you give when you got accepted?

*GRINS* of course there are so many words, those stories are either a novel and novella.

I kinda got accepted by an agent in Florida. Pretty soon, I will find others to see what their responds were.

**JClarke** · 07-19-2007, 10:49 PM

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Originally Posted by restless_heart

*GRINS* of course there are so many words, those stories are either a novel and novella.

I kinda got accepted by an agent in Florida. Pretty soon, I will find others to see what their responds were.

Do let us know what they think!

restless_heart · 07-19-2007, 10:54 PM

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Originally Posted by jclarke

Do let us know what they think!

I will. I only did sent 5 queries to five agencies. I got 4 accepted and one rejections. I let others three go because of this agent said about my weakness. I don't know. My goals is to find 600 for 2007. Who knows...

BEWARE: DO NOT EVER SEND ANY QUERY TO NEW YORK AGENCY including SCREENPLAY AGENCY, POETERY AGENCY, CHILDREN'S AGENCY, all 11 in them. They are scams.

**JClarke** · 07-19-2007, 10:56 PM

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Originally Posted by restless_heart

I will. I only did sent 5 queries to five agencies. I got 4 accepted and one rejections. I let others three go because of this agent said about my weakness. I don't know. My goals is to find 600 for 2007. Who knows...

BEWARE: DO NOT EVER SEND ANY QUERY TO NEW YORK AGENCY including SCREENPLAY AGENCY, POETERY AGENCY, CHILDREN'S AGENCY, all 11 in them. They are scams.

scammers are so bad ...idiots them, I guess.

I gotta cruise for now.... I'll be back on later this evening, ladies. Have a good night to you all

**KarissaMann05** · 07-19-2007, 10:58 PM

I have to go now.. I have a few personal problems tonight.. it's my personal.. GRRR
I'll try to discuss with you guys more about it. all right?

see ya!

<33

Jessie

restless_heart · 07-19-2007, 10:59 PM

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Originally Posted by jclarke

scammers are so bad ...idiots them, I guess.

I gotta cruise for now.... I'll be back on later this evening, ladies. Have a good night to you all

Good night! I got to get going soon...got to work in the early am.

**JClarke** · 07-19-2007, 11:00 PM

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Originally Posted by Mann_K05

I have to go now.. I have a few personal problems tonight.. it's my personal.. GRRR
I'll try to discuss with you guys more about it. all right?

see ya!

<33

Jessie

Later, Jessie! And by the way - you guys can call me Jake - that's my nickname

Adios, Peeps

restless_heart · 07-19-2007, 11:01 PM

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Originally Posted by Mann_K05

I have to go now.. I have a few personal problems tonight.. it's my personal.. GRRR
I'll try to discuss with you guys more about it. all right?

see ya!

<33

Jessie

Hope everything is alright. I will talk to you soon. Good night and sweet dreams.

Tess

Silentwolfdog · 07-20-2007, 12:24 AM

I did script and comic book but I never finish em. I am bad at finish something that I have started. People who have read em and listen to my idea told me to finish em. But I never did...maybe I will one day. I owe it to someone though. She is waiting on my story.
I need to because I have stories stuck in my mind that I need to put down on paper, lol.

**JClarke** · 07-20-2007, 06:27 AM

Tess,

I have to tell you that, one of your stories you wrote: "Faith, Love and Courage" - this story is excellent! (I have edited some few sentences and fixed some grammar, if you want to see the edited version, just let me know)

It is very interesting that the story was based on a true story, your description in this prologue is very good, like in what Eddy said in the letter for instance was good. I have to say.

But only one con, on your way of writing, all your paragraghs are squashed together, I suggest you try to seperate it out - just to make sure they are more room for the reader to read it in a relaxing way. (for example, in the edited version I did on your story).

Overall, very good story!

Jake

restless_heart · 07-20-2007, 04:32 PM

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Originally Posted by Silentwolfdog

I did script and comic book but I never finish em. I am bad at finish something that I have started. People who have read em and listen to my idea told me to finish em. But I never did...maybe I will one day. I owe it to someone though. She is waiting on my story.
I need to because I have stories stuck in my mind that I need to put down on paper, lol.

It is great!! I hope one day you will finish it, I would love to see it. My husband does comic since he was a kid, he will go back and finish where he left off and make a book out of it.

Write it down anyway, so you will remember later. Good luck!!

restless_heart · 07-20-2007, 04:47 PM

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Originally Posted by jclarke

Tess,

I have to tell you that, one of your stories you wrote: "Faith, Love and Courage" - this story is excellent! (I have edited some few sentences and fixed some grammar, if you want to see the edited version, just let me know)

It is very interesting that the story was based on a true story, your description in this prologue is very good, like in what Eddy said in the letter for instance was good. I have to say.

But only one con, on your way of writing, all your paragraghs are squashed together, I suggest you try to seperate it out - just to make sure they are more room for the reader to read it in a relaxing way. (for example, in the edited version I did on your story).

Overall, very good story!

Jake

Thank you. You read the whole thing one night?? You must be a fast reader. Elwood read it too. I know about that part where it was too much, I just save that part so I remember and figure out the good way to smooth out those long paragraphs. It was the first draft I wrote. I wrote this true story in three weeks flat and I never went back to edit my work yet. I know it needs to smooth it out. I just type and type nonstop till the end. And the story is not complete yet. I was going to work on it real soon. I want to finish it first, then go back to edit each chapters at a time. It was really hard for me to go back and finish the story.

An agent only saw my first work. They haven't seen my other work and the memoir yet. So was an agent right that my weakness was the POV (point of view) and structures?

Just send me email and I will let you know what I think. Thank you!! Talk to you soon.

**JClarke** · 07-21-2007, 01:53 AM

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Originally Posted by restless_heart

Thank you. You read the whole thing one night?? You must be a fast reader. Elwood read it too. I know about that part where it was too much, I just save that part so I remember and figure out the good way to smooth out those long paragraphs. It was the first draft I wrote. I wrote this true story in three weeks flat and I never went back to edit my work yet. I know it needs to smooth it out. I just type and type nonstop till the end. And the story is not complete yet. I was going to work on it real soon. I want to finish it first, then go back to edit each chapters at a time. It was really hard for me to go back and finish the story.

An agent only saw my first work. They haven't seen my other work and the memoir yet. So was an agent right that my weakness was the POV (point of view) and structures?

Just send me email and I will let you know what I think. Thank you!! Talk to you soon.

I read the story in one night, yes but assumably I was awake until 630am in the next morning as I was chatting to a new american dude on ooVoo (Video call/MSN like) and it was awesome I have been learning ASL lately, LOL.. and yes, I sent you a email with the attachment.

restless_heart · 07-21-2007, 06:33 PM

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Originally Posted by jclarke

I read the story in one night, yes but assumably I was awake until 630am in the next morning as I was chatting to a new american dude on ooVoo (Video call/MSN like) and it was awesome I have been learning ASL lately, LOL.. and yes, I sent you a email with the attachment.

Thank you I got the email. It was the right way-how to break those paragraphs. I was going to do that. I wrote nonstop...hold and type...hold and type...hold and type till the end. So that way some I may need or not, and was going to change around a little to make it shorter or whatever, if you know what I mean...
I laughed because it wasn't just me who made the grammers. It was my uncle's as well. He really did wrote that letter and made pry about 1,000 copies since over 600 came to his veiwing and received that letter. I copied excaltly the way he wrote it. I don't know if I can photocopy it and put in a novel, but I typed the whole thing instead. As for mine, I overlooked...

Thank you anyways.

I am going to try put an avatior under my name. I did had trouble.

**KarissaMann05** · 07-21-2007, 06:37 PM

just let you know, writers.
i'm free by tmw (Sunday of 22nd) and after 1pm on monday of 23rd.

So, we able to discuss more.

I'd rather to pick an AIM chatroom.
How about you guys?

I have to leave AllDeaf in around 30 to 45 minutes left. I have to do things for tonight... Oh, well.

restless_heart · 07-21-2007, 06:44 PM

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Originally Posted by Mann_K05

just let you know, writers.
i'm free by tmw (Sunday of 22nd) and after 1pm on monday of 23rd.

So, we able to discuss more.

I'd rather to pick an AIM chatroom.
How about you guys?

I have to leave AllDeaf in around 30 to 45 minutes left. I have to do things for tonight... Oh, well.

Ok sounds good

Let me know. It is easier that way than to go off topic, lol...I pulled a muscle at work

and my boss let me leave early

**KarissaMann05** · 07-21-2007, 06:57 PM

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Originally Posted by restless_heart

Ok sounds good

Let me know. It is easier that way than to go off topic, lol...I pulled a muscle at work

and my boss let me leave early

Aw, I'm sorry about that.. :[
Do you think you will make it to be there on 22nd at 3pm (your time), for being there at chatroom? I'll be on around 11ish in morning in my time.

Anyway -
What do you like to talk about writing, talent, or etc? I like to share with.

restless_heart · 07-21-2007, 07:07 PM

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Originally Posted by Mann_K05

Aw, I'm sorry about that.. :[
Do you think you will make it to be there on 22nd at 3pm (your time), for being there at chatroom? I'll be on around 11ish in morning in my time.

Anyway -
What do you like to talk about writing, talent, or etc? I like to share with.

Sunday is 22nd? Mon is 23rd, trying to remember today's date, lol...as soon as I can I will no later than 5 pm in my time.

He found my grammers

I was like uh oh, lol. But so far mostly my uncle's. I wonder if that is all, just breaking paragraphs and grammers. So I can tell an agent to kiss my you know where...

**KarissaMann05** · 07-21-2007, 07:11 PM

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Originally Posted by restless_heart

Sunday is 22nd? Mon is 23rd, trying to remember today's date, lol...as soon as I can I will no later than 5 pm in my time.

He found my grammers

I was like uh oh, lol. But so far mostly my uncle's. I wonder if that is all, just breaking paragraphs and grammers. So I can tell an agent to kiss my you know where...

Quote:

Sunday is 22nd? Mon is 23rd, trying to remember today's date, lol...as soon as I can I will no later than 5 pm in my time.

Ok, sure. I'll try remind you if I can remember, heh.

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He found my grammers

I was like uh oh, lol. But so far mostly my uncle's. I wonder if that is all, just breaking paragraphs and grammers. So I can tell an agent to kiss my you know where...

lol, he's very good at editing, much better than mine. lol =P
I am sure he has great eyes.

Aha, okay. ^_^

restless_heart · 07-21-2007, 07:14 PM

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Originally Posted by Mann_K05

Ok, sure. I'll try remind you if I can remember, heh.

lol, he's very good at edditing, much better than mine. lol =P
I am sure he has great eyes.

Aha, okay. ^_^

We will always need other set of eyes. We can miss it easily because we read it too man times and our eyes swift fast to miss our mistakes.

restless_heart · 07-21-2007, 07:16 PM

*off topic*

Is there a picture limit you can get picture from your computer file for the avaitor? Or it has to be alldeaf's avaitors? If the pic is too large, how to make it smaller?

**KarissaMann05** · 07-21-2007, 07:17 PM

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Originally Posted by restless_heart

We will always need other set of eyes. We can miss it easily because we read it too man times and our eyes swift fast to miss our mistakes.

Ah! Mostly. D'oh..

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07-19-2007, 10:38 PM	#65 (permalink)
JClarke I.T Guru Join Date: Nov 2006 Location: Canberra, Australia Posts: 28,050 Blog Entries: 6	Whoa - these stories got plenty of words - that will take me ages to read but Iwill leave it aside for now as I have a meeting to go to very soon, but i will post up what I think when I have finished reading the stories of yours and also which agents did you give when you got accepted? __________________ This is not a ASL version Owner of the Postwhore Club If you have 5,000 posts - please send me a PM requesting to join.

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KarissaMann05 Premium Member Join Date: May 2007 Location: Salem, Oregon Posts: 6,378	I have to go now.. I have a few personal problems tonight.. it's my personal.. GRRR I'll try to discuss with you guys more about it. all right? see ya! <33 Jessie __________________ "Pragmatic language is a vital social skill that enables the school-aged child to navigate their way through demanding social situations." -- R. Owens

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Silentwolfdog Registered User Join Date: Feb 2007 Location: Earth Posts: 931	I did script and comic book but I never finish em. I am bad at finish something that I have started. People who have read em and listen to my idea told me to finish em. But I never did...maybe I will one day. I owe it to someone though. She is waiting on my story. I need to because I have stories stuck in my mind that I need to put down on paper, lol. __________________ If you are using red or blue font, there's a good chance that I am not reading your posts due to it being blended into background! I have loved the stars too fondly to be fearful of the night. ~Sarah William Check my art at http://silentwolfdog.deviantart.com

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JClarke I.T Guru Join Date: Nov 2006 Location: Canberra, Australia Posts: 28,050 Blog Entries: 6	Faith, Love and Courage Tess, I have to tell you that, one of your stories you wrote: "Faith, Love and Courage" - this story is excellent! (I have edited some few sentences and fixed some grammar, if you want to see the edited version, just let me know) It is very interesting that the story was based on a true story, your description in this prologue is very good, like in what Eddy said in the letter for instance was good. I have to say. But only one con, on your way of writing, all your paragraghs are squashed together, I suggest you try to seperate it out - just to make sure they are more room for the reader to read it in a relaxing way. (for example, in the edited version I did on your story). Overall, very good story! Jake __________________ This is not a ASL version Owner of the Postwhore Club If you have 5,000 posts - please send me a PM requesting to join.

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KarissaMann05 Premium Member Join Date: May 2007 Location: Salem, Oregon Posts: 6,378	just let you know, writers. i'm free by tmw (Sunday of 22nd) and after 1pm on monday of 23rd. So, we able to discuss more. I'd rather to pick an AIM chatroom. How about you guys? I have to leave AllDeaf in around 30 to 45 minutes left. I have to do things for tonight... Oh, well. __________________ "Pragmatic language is a vital social skill that enables the school-aged child to navigate their way through demanding social situations." -- R. Owens

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restless_heart Registered User Join Date: Jun 2007 Location: somewhere in the mountain, Pennsylvania Posts: 1,349	off topic Is there a picture limit you can get picture from your computer file for the avaitor? Or it has to be alldeaf's avaitors? If the pic is too large, how to make it smaller?

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