The fact story. (English class)

My teacher told us, to write the fact story for 3 pages.

I revised it like twice.
I don't know if this grammar is ok.
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Girl tops transplant list after error

A hispanic girl, who was 17 years old, received two lungs and a heart that did not match her blood type. She went to the best hospital in this country. On February 7, 2003, the doctor removed her heart and both lungs, then transplanted a heart and two lungs in her chest. Unfortunately, all three of them, were not compatible, because her blood type was different than the transplanted organs blood type.

The doctors were hoping to find the same blood type and the right size organs for her. Time was running out, because her body rejected the new organs transplants. She became more ill. She was small for her age, her height is five foot, two inches, and her weight was eighty-give pounds. The fact was, she needed organs from a child donor.

She waited for new organ transplants for three years. Her heart was deformed, which means abonormal, and both of her lungs shut down and collasped.

On Friday the 21st, they found new organs and removed the first organ transplants, then they put the new organs in her chest. Mack Maloney, who is her god father, visits her in the hospital, said the new organs in her chest were "working perfect" and there were no signs of organs rejection.

Her mother was concerned about her daughter and the risks. She would have to face many complications, such as: what would happen during her surgery, rejecting the first organs, in addition to the possibility of the wrong blood type. Her doctor said the second surgery would give her only a fifty percent chance to live. If she did not have them, she would die.

The hospital took her for an EGG and saw noticed no brain activity, whih means she was offically dead. Her doctor, who advised her family to turn her respiratory machine off. Her parents were devastated about her situation and her mother said if she died, the doctors murdered her.

To remember the blood types.

-The blood type A can have a blood type is A or O.
-The blood type B, also can have a blood type B or O
-The blood type AB can have any blood types (AB, A, B, or O)
-The blood type O only demand to have a blood type is O and nothing else.

Looks good to me.

Originally posted by VamPyroX
Looks good to me.

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Agreed.

psst there's someone correct your some grammar in other site.

Here's the final draft. I got a grade for this.

So, You Say You Need A New Heart?

Organ transplant are an everday occurrence throughout the world. People can of ten receive, kindey, liver, even limb transplants without any problems. However, sometimes things go wrong. The media tends to pick up on these stories. Here is one of them.

On February 7, 2003, a Hispanic girl named Jesica Santillan, age 17, received a triple organ transplant. This was performed at the prestigious Duke University Hospital. Though the hospital has a reputation for outstanding successful surgeries, on this occasion a fatal mistake was made. The heart and two lungs transplanted into the five foot two, eighty-five pound body of this young girl were the wrong blood type.

Why is blood type such an important factor when transplanting organs? Because certain blood types will accept or reject other blood types. The rules are: blood type A is compatible with B or O types; blood type AB can be comatible with types AB, A, B, or O; and blood type O is only compatible with O. Young Jesica was blood type O The organs were blood type A.

When Jesica's body began rejecting her new organs, the doctors found the mistake. They immediately began a massive search for new organs, this time with blood type O. It had already taken three years for the doctors to find these first three organs. Finding three more organs with time quickly running out was almost an impossibility. Also, she really needed organs from a child donor.

On february 21st, 14 days after her first surgery, Duke University located new organs for Jesica. A second triple organ transplant was immediately started. However, this transplant, along with the complications from the first botched transplant, had taken its toll on young Jesica. The doctors informed her mother, godfather, and the rest of her relatives that she had only a fifty percent chance of living through this ordeal.

After the second surgery, the hospital staff took her for an EEG (Electronencephalography- an electro medical device which allows capture of the brain's electrical activity.) and noticed no brain activity, which meant she was officially dead. Duke University doctors advised Jesica's family that they were turning her respiratory machine off. Jesica's family was devastated about the situation and her mother said, "If she died, the doctor murdered her."

How did this happen? How could something so routine, so "natural" in this day age as having a trasplant, have gone so wrong? How could something as basic as mathing a person's blood type to the organs they were about to receive become such a compliated thing?

Jesica's doctor, James Jagger, took responsibility for the botched prodedure and for not triple checking the blood type before proceeding with the operation. There is, however, another aspect to this story. A company by the name of? Was responsible for confirming an organ match with Jesica and then sending the organs to the hospital. This company is obvious in business to make a profit, not to perate in the red. So, is it possible that the push to "make money" could have been a major factor in so many people neglecting to confirm something as basic and routine as the blood type of both the donor and the recipient?

When the issue of there being another party involved in this trasnplant process, this for-profit company, becomes a factor, does it not make some wonder who monitors them? Who is making sure that the people working for that company are properly trained to follow all procedures for safety and precautions to prevent such tragedies as the death of Jesica? Who makes sure that the companies that the hospital hire to find these organs for them are operating under whatever regulations the government has set up for them?

All of these questions can make one pause for a long moment and wonder "Are organ transplants really that safe? Should I view them as 'routine' procedures, or should I now be in fear?" If nothing else, this case has made myself, and others, more aware of the risks truly involved in such a procedure. The truth is, in the end they really are putting their life in the hands of complete strangers, some of who they will never meet. Did they check your blood type?

Looks pretty good, but could use some polishing. But I gotta admit my English grammar skills may be off-kilter since I last took English classes a long time ago.


Which English compositition class r u taking Eternity .....english 101 or creative writing?

I took an English 091 last semester. There's no 101. English is fun for me to learn the new things. It helped me to improve my grammar skills which isn't bad. Someday, I would like to start write an autobiography book.

Originally posted by eternity
I took an English 091 last semester. There's no 101. English is fun for me to learn the new things. It helped me to improve my grammar skills which isn't bad. Someday, I would like to start write an autobiography book.

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After all it's not a bad start for ur creative writing.