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Old 04-21-2008, 06:48 PM   #5 (permalink)
Matilda
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I'll be gentle as I can so forgive me if I sound harsh or picking.

Is this the 1st chapter?, or a short story?

Little girl’s Mom … conjecture here? how do you know, it could be an aunt or whomever?

Both of them deaf, or the girl? … presumption here?

“I have enrolled in the Deaf interpreting/advocate program at my local college.” … Does that seem technical sounding of the words/harsh among the reflective words at the beginning, or is that your intention?
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